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March 4, 2010

Flash Friday 55 - Water World



Submerged in the undulating fluid
The pulsating heat swallows any sign of tension

Steam rises, to envelop, creating a virtual veil

Voices are shrouded, leaving space for thoughts


Beads of moisture collect on her face
to ultimately join the primary vessel

Time slows to be measured by the rising volume
of the internal pounding beat



Write a story or poem with exactly 55 words
Go see Mr. G if you'd like to play
@ Mr.-G
(he knowsitall and counts 'em all too!)

19 comments:

  1. "...voices are shrouded leaving space for thoughts..." Beautiful!

    Mine is here.

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  2. i feel my tension draining. nice 55!

    mine is up!

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  3. Sherry...
    I couldn't see the pic, but the story was FANTASTIC!
    You sure can write Lady.
    Excellent 55!!!
    Thank you so much for playing today.
    You Rock Baby!
    Have a Kick Ass Week-End....G

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  4. So many great lines here, especially, "Steam rises, to envelop, creating a virtual veil." Great, very relaxing, 55 :)

    My 55 is The Schedule

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  5. Hey, why am I blushing? My picture may have been different than yours.

    Mine's Up: Shirt Tales

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  6. beautifully written, like a complete cycle of life, awesome words!!

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  7. Think I'd have called this Bath Time ! :) Enjoyed the sploshing in water....

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  8. Lovely. You paint such a peaceful picture.

    My post is up here.

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  9. Beautiful and relaxing. An image of freedom from the inside out.

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  10. Lovely writing! I couldn't see the illustration but that didn't matter in the least.

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  11. Very nice. You describe the experience perfectly.

    PG

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  12. Reading your previous posts tonight. It was interesting to me to read that you were at a meeting with anger as the topic after a meeting with grief as the topic. But, before those, you went to church with freedom as the topic. I wonder which meeting you got the most out of. Hope it was the freedom one.

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  13. Can't see the pic but I love the story.

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  14. Just read your last port and thought of MY angry feelings - then read this post and calmed myself down!
    I don't suppose to know what you intend with your poem, but for me it brought images of me getting a facial - the most amazing & relaxing experience (I just had my first one in my life a month ago as 2 friends gave me a gift cert for Christmas.)... so peaceful.
    Thanks for sharing your work :)
    God bless.

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  15. Very nice, Sherry....glad I came by!!

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  16. I was thinking jacuzzi when I read this. Or some kind of massage or spa, or both... Very relaxing and wery well written. Great 55/ Jo.

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